Current mood:-Pretty satisfied; great day girls :)
Listening to:-My little brother sing Cascada off-tune :P oh and The Rasmus!
Current quote:-'When patterns are broken, new worlds emerge'.
I am loving the feedback, and and and my tenth follower * does a happy dance * Yes, here I am getting super psyched about having ten followers while there are blogs with over a hundred but hey, you gotta start somewhere right? :p
Carpe Diem, Material Girl and all of my Anonymouses not to mention every one else who's given me inspiration thanks so much for the feedback, much appreciated. I still haven't figured out a name, I liked the idea about the past and the reserructed but I couldn't see it as a name. How's the forgotten? I honestly think picking a name is the hardest part >.<'
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P8- (This one's for you Carpe Diem though I haven't done it your way, I really don't know how to so you're going to have to help me with that :p )
*I want to continue with Fahad’s perspective for a bit because everything’s just so long, I can’t cram it all into one post.
All of a sudden, I sprung to my feet. I shouldn’t be sitting here; I should be with my best friend. I didn’t know what I was going to say to him or how I was going to stop him, all I knew was that I was going to fight for him. I was not going to let him do this to himself.
I don’t know how many speeding tickets I might’ve got but I could deal with that all later. As I zoomed across the road, I silently prayed that I wasn’t too late.
I neared his house and I quickly got out of the car and bolted up the stairs in his house. I felt a sense of relief wash over me as I saw him crouched over on his back on the balcony with his hands on neck.
I quickly walked up to him and sat myself next to him.
Me: ‘You don’t want to do this Abood’.
Abood: ‘Right now, I don’t really know what I want’.
Me: ‘If you do this then her losing her life would all be for a waste...Yes, it was probably the stupidest thing you could’ve done and completely idiotic but there’s nothing you can do now except learn from this and live for her, live the life that she wasn’t able to’.
Abood: ‘If only things were that easy. You know the worst part is, I’m not even being punished for this because of who my family is. Accident or not, according to the law, I should be in jail’.
Me: ‘…You can’t turn yourself in, what good will it do?’
Abood: ‘I’m not going to turn myself in but turn my life around; I think I’m going to start by finding Hala’s friend’.
Monday, August 10, 2009
Being Aaliyah [P8]
Posted by Wafa J at 3:54 AM
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4 comments:
Awwe =) *jumps up and down satisfying her inner child*. Thank you!
Yeah, if you have most of the story sketched out, then it's hard to change to third perspective now.
Hmm, I see what you mean about the dual perspectives. I guess it will be hard to view 3bood's side of the story without it.
For me, it would be best if you just used fahad's perspective to indirectly characterize 3bood and reveal his side of what happened, like you did in this post.
However, if a spark does occur between any two characters, keep the perspective one sided - that way it would stay real.
Kind of like twilight - about the only thing that was good about it was the well developed first perspective - Bella's. It sort of made it more real.
And then she ruined the entire series with Jacob's retarded pespective. You get me?
Still, in the end your story, your choice.
Okay, I shut up now.
Awaiting part 9...
Let's hope 3bood really does turn his life around.
FINALLY! <3
Dom dom dommmmmmmmmm
Yes its me anony1 as sm1 I believe referred to me once:p
Short post, buuuttt has action
I guess that is wt I was missing :)
Until ur next post
Anony1 :p
Carpe Diem: Haha, Yaay! I'm doing my best to change things around. If it still doesn't work I promise the next story I do will use your advice for sure but I got advice in the form of a dream telling me how to change it :P A sign, perhaps? I'll try and do that but the advantage of twilight was that Edward could read minds; you didn't need their perspective as you already had it buut I'll work on it :) x
Material Girl: The next one will hopefully be up sooner x
Anony1: Haha you're the original anonymous on this blog ;p Thank you. Next post should be up soon x
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